that song

what was that song that Chrissie Hynde sang?
you know the one – was that a Nick Lowe song?

or was it written by somebody else? – I can’t remember

I found the fence I had carved our initials in
the deadwood, because you wouldn’t let me carve

a symbol of our love into a living tree, not even just the bark

that should have been a give-away right there, the deadwood
a foreshadowing of our relationship, and now down to the beach

where I scrawl my hate in the sand for the waves to wash away

then I sit here at night on the edge of the dunes
staring at the faint stars amongst the coastal fog

touching the silver leaves, listening to the breakers

/ / /

So, this poem started with the May 15th Poetry Freeforall at Margo Roby’s Wordgathering. There I saw a link to Jeremy’s Daily Challenge, specifically Weekly Challenge 20. Margo had also posted a link to dVerse, which was about antithesis. So, thinking about antithesis and Jeremy’s theme prompt of “Love in music” brought me to to “Thin Line Between Love and Hate” as performed by The Pretenders. I also used the “faint stars and the silver leaves” poetic line and the quote by Napoleon Hill.

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8 thoughts on “that song

  1. Oh, yes. I love the structure which complements the content. I’m so glad all those prompts came together for this. Your speaker has a vivid voice. Those last four lines, dynamite.

    • Margo, thank you. PoMoSco got me thinking about structure more – that and the How Poets Write MOOC. I always appreciate your comments. Glad you liked those final lines.

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