beatnik bar
the diminishing palace
of diminishing virtue
drunk on ditch poetry
the poet not only bends
the rules, he breaks them
and has bad line breaks too
this long room full of drunks
with diminishing wishes
and broken steps
(or is that
diminishing steps
and broken wishes?
no
better to go with the first
don’t overthink it)
they burden the poet
with their life poetry
the virtues they dropped
and he recites aloud
steps with each iamb
on the room’s wooden floor
the stories of their ditched dreams
the virtue of drams
in this poetry drunk palace
/ / /
This poem was written in response to Wordle 91 at The Sunday Whirl.
Ah! This is fun in the way it speaks truths. I love the structure and the playing. I always love the playing. Clever, Richard.
So very good to see you. margo
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Mmm. Poetry drunk palace. That’s good.
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I’ll meet you all there with an extra set of bongos.
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Yeah… Drink it in , but don’t get drunk… :):)
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Ditch Poetry? A new form, Richard? Really like the playfulness and whimsy here. Now can you give the old lady directions so I can join the party? I sort of like the sounds of ditch poetry,
Elizabeth
http://soulsmusic.wordpress.com/2013/01/13/once-again/
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Absolutely crazy about “ditch poetry”.
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Oh Richard I love the drunken wheel within a wheel feel to this … there’s almost a desperate feel to it, at least that’s how it felt to me …interesting and different from anything else I’ve read.
http://thepoet-tree-house.blogspot.ca/2013/01/line-breaks.html
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Richard, I love this piece. Very interesting use of the words.
Pamela
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Great piece, yea some Beats got very creative with the line breaks
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RICHARD! I found you again! The Beats were so… beat. There is one side that screams, “Shrieking EGO” and another side that was truly thoughtful. But for every Bukowski, there were (and are) thousands of pretenders. Kind of like barnacles, trying to catch a ride on his fame… you caught this very well. So good to read you again! Amy
http://sharplittlepencil.com/2013/01/14/the-royal-pain/
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Mmmm…. I love the use of repeated words – the poem spirals back upon itself in a wonderful way. Thank you for sharing this with us!
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I’m afraid I’ve written some ditch poetry in my lifetime…
Repetition seems to be the way you grab—and hold—the reader’s attention in this piece, which I have savored. Thank you!
Whirling with Bram Stoker
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Richard, as always, your words deliver! Never had a doubt, Brother!
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As always, I am fascinated at the variety of responses that rise so beautifully from the same dozen words. Nicely done!.
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Wonderful, Richard. I love the `poetry drunk palace’.
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